Here you’ll find examples of how we helped former students of ours stand out from the pack of applicants to highly selective colleges and ultimately gain admission. Each case presented below is a unique case. And that’s true of each student’s case that we work on because if a student doesn’t seem unique, we’ve got to find a way to help present the student as unique. Read More >
Much of this work is done in college admissions essays. College admissions essays are an important opportunity to stand out and tell your story. So many students either fail to capitalize on the tremendous opportunities in their college admissions essays or they make major mistakes that could adversely effect their candidacy.
Much of this work is also done as we help students prepare answers for college interviews. It’s done on the activity sheet. And it’s even done in teacher and guidance counselor letters of recommendation. Yes, we help out students influence what is written in these letters. For our students, all components of the college application must contribute to the powerful and truthful narrative that we’re sharing with admissions officers. It’s what gives our students the edge. It’s why our students get into highly selective colleges year in and year out.
SITUATION: In the middle of December, after colleges sent out their Early Decision / Early Action notifications, we received a phone call from Sam. Sam was expecting to gain admission to Yale, but he was deferred. While he knew that he had another shot in the Regular Decision round, he wasn’t sure if he had made any mistakes on his Yale application. He was particularly concerned about his college admissions essays. And if he did make any mistakes, he didn’t want to make the same mistakes on his other applications.
CHALLENGES: Sam was an orthodox Jewish student coming from a yeshiva. He had an A average, and between a 720 and 740 on each section of his SATs. He had scores of 700 and above on three Subject Tests. While his extracurricular activities were good, there was nothing that he had that would wow admissions officers at Ivy League colleges. And aside from being viewed as a well-rounded candidate, Sam’s biggest challenge was that he applied to a school (Yale) with a student body that was almost 30% Jewish. That’s a huge number! As a result, Yale may have viewed Sam’s application as one that brought no diversity to the freshman class. Yale saw Sam as just another orthodox Jewish student. Also, while the competition in the Early round is certainly keen, the competition in the Regular Decision round is so much more intense. For example, in the year that Sam applied, Yale received 5,257 Early Action applications and accepted 761 applicants at a rate of 14.5%. In the Regular Decision round, Yale received 22,025 applications and accepted 1,245 applicants at a rate of 5.7%. So this intensified Sam’s challenge.
COLLEGE GOALS: Yale, Harvard, Columbia, Penn, Cornell, and NYU.
HOW THE IVY COACH HELPED: After reading through Sam’s college admissions essays and his Yale application, we found a number of issues that hurt his candidacy. The college admissions essays were ordinary and while he had some very unique characteristics, he neglected to discuss them. We helped Sam craft new college admissions essays that told his story. We also encouraged him to apply to Princeton University. Princeton doesn’t get too many applications from orthodox Jews who attend yeshivas. In fact, Princeton’s undergraduate Jewish population is about 7.5 percent. That’s a vast difference from Yale’s. Harvard’s Jewish population is about 25%. And Penn’s is about 27%. Jewish students aren’t exactly a minority at the University of Pennsylvania!
COLLEGE RESULTS: Sam was accepted at Columbia, Cornell, NYU, and Princeton. He chose to attend Princeton. He was waitlisted at Harvard and Penn and denied admission at Yale. We can never be 100% certain why he got into Princeton. But we can have a very good idea. We feel that while he had wonderful grades and good scores, as an orthodox Jew, Princeton saw him as a way to add diversity to their class.
SITUATION: Deepak came to The Ivy Coach in June after he graduated from high school. He had been rejected from all of the colleges to which he applied. Every now and then, it happens. While he could have applied to some less selective colleges at the time or attended his local community college, he and his parents had bigger dreams.
CHALLENGES: With an A- average in the most rigorous high school courses, solid SATs and good Subject Tests, Deepak's extracurricular activities were, to say the least, ordinary. He played the piano, was a member of his school's math team, ran track, and volunteered at a local hospital. The main issue was that with these activities, he looked like too many other Indian applicants. In addition, one of the college admissions essays that he submitted was about how he loved to sleep. Another was about how he would stare out his window and watch people as they passed by. Again, from his bed. Take a lesson from Deepak: Don't ever write about sleep in your college admissions essays! Oy vey.
COLLEGE GOALS: Since he previously applied to Harvard, Columbia, Yale, Princeton, Stanford, and Amherst, he couldn't reapply to these colleges because they would have reviewed his previous application. And if they had a look at his college admissions essays again, he was doomed. His new college choices were Penn, Duke, UCLA, UC Berkeley, Washington University in St. Louis, Northwestern, Johns Hopkins, and Emory.
HOW THE IVY COACH HELPED: We encouraged Deepak to take a GAP year and then reapply for admission. A GAP year is a year between high school and college. When we asked him what he would like to do for this year, he mentioned that he would love to go to India and visit with his grandparents and cousins. But playing with his cousins wasn't going to score him any points with highly selective college admissions officers. This was not going to work. So we brainstormed further.
Deepak mentioned that there was a rehabilitation center for children with neurological disorders in Mumbai and that he would like to volunteer there as a tutor. Since this is not something that would stand out on his college applications because too many applicants are involved in tutoring, we brainstormed some more and came up with the idea that with his love of filmmaking, he would create a documentary for the center. He spent a few months at the center interviewing the staff and the children and when it was completed, he went back home and raised funds for the center by showing his film. His new college applications told his now powerful story.
COLLEGE RESULTS: Deepak submitted his college applications on January 1st and by the middle of February, he received a likely letter from one of his top choices that said, "we loved how you combined your passion for filmmaking with your community service." While he was later accepted at all of the colleges to which he applied, Deepak chose to attend the University of Pennsylvania.
SITUATION: Kim came to The Ivy Coach in her junior year of high school. She had an A average in the most rigorous courses her high school offered with respectable test scores. She played the clarinet, was on the varsity soccer team, and participated in the drama club. Her academic interests were biology and chemistry but although she wanted to conduct science research, there were no opportunities to do so at her school.
CHALLENGES: Kim wanted to apply to Harvard but unless she achieved something that made her more angular, she would be viewed as a well-rounded candidate. And as a Chinese-American, her application would not stand-out from the thousands of other Chinese-American applicants.
COLLEGE GOALS: Harvard, Yale, Princeton, Stanford, MIT, Columbia, Dartmouth, Penn, and Brown.
HOW THE IVY COACH HELPED: We encouraged Kim to conduct research at a local university. We found a professor who was doing work using nanoparticles to attack ovarian cancer cells and was willing to mentor a high school student. Kimberly ended up loving the research and her college admissions essays would reflect her love for scientific discovery. These college admissions essays proved quite powerful. And in the fall of her senior year, Kimberly submitted her research to the Intel Science Talent Search. She would be the only student from her state to be named a semi-finalist.
COLLEGE RESULTS: Kim was accepted at all the colleges to which she applied and chose to attend Harvard University.